Nice to see news on the Audio front
Well, to answer you question, I am personally a fan of orchestrial pieces but I don't really mind the more techno-ish pieces(which I believe this piece to be).
Starting off..well, the whole thing has that distinct "fuzzy"(in the lack of a better word) sound to it, but I'm going to assume that it is only because it's a WIP.
However, I do feel like the song starts off to fast and too sudden. Take note of Hell March 3 (look it up on Youtube) which starts off slow and quiet and then spends 25 seconds revving up.
I agree with J-qb and think that it could use more deeper and bassier sounds. And the snares/hithat's he mentioned.
Out of curousity, how are you and Hopeku distributing the work?